Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Letter.

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope your doing great. I have seen an advertisement in a magazine I come to know that you are look for a person who can look after your baby. I want to do this job. I have done Early Childhood Educator assistance course and also have experience in working in a daycare with children. I love to be around children. I can do this job perfectly.

I am a suitable person for this job because I have certificate of ECEA and and have experience. I am now not working anywhere. So I would love to do this job. I am eagerly waiting for your response.

Kind regards,

Rajveer kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address all parts of the task. While you mention why you want the job and your suitability, you completely omit the requirement to explain how you would spend your free time in Australia. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. To improve, you must ensure every bullet point in the prompt is covered with sufficient detail and expand your writing to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is very brief, making it difficult to establish a clear logical progression. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the ideas are presented in a fragmented manner. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. To achieve a higher score, you should use linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your sentences and ensure your ideas flow logically from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'look after your baby' and 'do this job' are used multiple times, which limits the range of your expression. There is little evidence of less common or more precise vocabulary. To improve, try to use more descriptive language related to childcare and professional experience, and avoid repeating the same simple verbs throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. For example, 'I hope your doing great' should be 'you're', and 'you are look for' should be 'looking for'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. You need to focus on basic subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency to improve your accuracy, while also practicing the use of complex sentence structures.

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