Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in the job that you published in the last Monday's newspaper. I believe I am the most suitable applicant for this job, because of my passion and experience.

I am a person who loves to take care of kids especially small kids under the age of 10 by playing games , telling stories. Moreover, I can cook delicious dishes for them and can take them to near by parks on their free times makes them more relaxed.

In addition, I had a couple of years of experience in babysitting where I used to help children in their academic works of different ages. Furthermore, I am a good listener and I can listen to the problems of them and can provide them an emotional support.

If I get this job, during my leisure time I would like to study guitar online because, I am interested about music too.

Thank you for giving attention to this matter and I am hoping I will get this job.

Yours sincerely,

JIthu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and describing your leisure plans. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, when discussing your suitability, you mention babysitting experience and being a good listener, but these points could be expanded with more specific examples of how you handled past situations. The letter covers the requirements well enough to be clear, but further elaboration would elevate the response to a higher band level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' and 'Furthermore' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined. The flow between sentences is generally smooth, but there are instances where the connection between ideas could be more natural. Overall, the structure is clear and easy to follow, which is sufficient for this band level.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'express my interest' and 'emotional support' are appropriate. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'academic works' (should be 'schoolwork' or 'studies') and 'on their free times' (should be 'in their free time'). While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the vocabulary remains somewhat limited and repetitive. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on more precise collocations would help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'in the last Monday's newspaper' is incorrect (should be 'in last Monday's newspaper'), and 'listen to the problems of them' is awkward phrasing (should be 'listen to their problems'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor issues with comma usage and spacing around punctuation marks. The errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score.

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