Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you all are doing well and healthy. I am writing this email regarding my interest in your advertisement in the magazine.

In that adverstisement, I read that you are looking for someone to live with your family with a lease of six months. Additionally, the person who intends to live with the family has to look after your six-year-old child.

I would like to consider this job, as recently, I have been working with the child care facility in our city. In that facility, I am responsible to take care of the group of childrens with the age range of four-years-old to ten-years-old. So, I believe that I will be suitable for this job at your accomodation.

For my remaining free time in Australia, I will spend most of the time in training for professional soccer in a recreational centre. And I will explore some historic places in this city.

Thank you for reading this email.

I really hope for a positive reply from you.

Regards,

Het

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explained your interest in the job, provided relevant background regarding your childcare experience, and outlined your plans for your free time in Australia. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. To reach a higher band, you could expand on why your specific experience with children aged four to ten makes you a good fit for a six-year-old, perhaps by mentioning specific activities or patience. The response is clear and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized, with each paragraph addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'So', and 'For my remaining free time' to link your ideas. While the structure is clear, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your paragraphing is distinct. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your points clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary such as 'child care facility', 'recreational centre', and 'advertisement'. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'adverstisement' (spelling), 'childrens' (incorrect pluralization), and 'accomodation' (spelling). To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure accurate spelling of common words. The range is sufficient to convey your meaning without difficulty.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'I hope you all are doing well and healthy' (awkward phrasing), 'responsible to take care' (should be 'responsible for taking care'), and 'with the age range of' (slightly unnatural). Punctuation is generally correct, but the sentence structures could be more varied to demonstrate greater control. The errors present do not impede communication, but they do occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.

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