Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Writing Test Part-1

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for care-tacker position of your six-year-old child and live with your family for six months.

Actually, I found out about this opportunity through an Australian magazine. I personally reckon that I would be perfect for this job as I have been tacking care of children since 10 years. I have previously worked in child daycare and also as personal care-giver for 3-year-child.

Moreover I love this job because I love nurturing kids and help them grow in very positive way. Despite of the fact that most people prefer to keep female as their child's care-tacker I have more abilities man to treat children nicely along with staying with family.

I would love spend quality time with your family and your child. It would be my honour to a part of your family so that we can hang-out together and raise your child.

Yours faithfully,

Prijansh Raval

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your interest in the role, provide relevant experience, and mention your desire to spend time with the family. However, the third bullet point regarding how you would spend your free time in Australia is underdeveloped; you mention wanting to 'hang-out' with the family, but you do not describe any personal activities or exploration of Australia, which is what the prompt specifically requested. To improve, ensure each bullet point is given equal weight and detail. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal application, though some phrasing is slightly informal for a professional letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Despite of the fact that' to link ideas. However, the transition between ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined. The final paragraph is quite brief and lacks a clear concluding thought that ties the letter together. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that flows naturally into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'opportunity', 'nurturing', and 'honour'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and spelling errors, such as 'care-tacker' instead of 'caretaker' and 'tacking care' instead of 'taking care'. Additionally, 'reckon' is quite informal for a formal letter of application. To improve, focus on using more precise professional terminology and proofread carefully to avoid spelling mistakes that detract from your credibility as a candidate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'since 10 years' should be 'for 10 years', and 'Despite of the fact' is incorrect; it should be 'Despite the fact'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'as personal care-giver for 3-year-child'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on mastering basic tense consistency and common prepositional collocations to improve your accuracy.

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