Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope you doing well,

I am writing this letter after reading your advertise about need a child care Nani for your children and i am fully qualified for that job.

I am very excited for this job because i love to spend time with children because they do not judge you by your status I am suitable for this job because i done early childhood Couse so i know every little thing about the children.

I also have experience of one year of child care but now that family move to another state but i give you the detail and contact of that family so that you will take my feedback and will know about my worth.

I my free time i went to the park and saw the children playing that give me peace and remind of my own children. So that is why i love to take care of children like my own child.

Hope you like my letter and reassume which i attached and give me positive response about it

Your Faithfully,

sukhvir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and describing your free time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, your explanation of why you would be a suitable person is brief, and the section regarding your free time is slightly confusing, as you describe what you currently do rather than what you would do while in Australia. To improve, ensure that each point is fully expanded with more specific details to demonstrate your suitability and future plans more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow between sentences is often disjointed due to a lack of cohesive devices. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, which makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. There are also issues with punctuation, such as the lack of full stops between thoughts, which hinders the logical flow. Using transition words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help connect your ideas more effectively and improve the overall readability of your letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You use terms like 'job' and 'children' frequently. There are also some errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'advertise' instead of 'advertisement', 'Nani' instead of 'nanny', and 'reassume' instead of 'resume'. To achieve a higher band score, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to childcare and professional correspondence. For instance, instead of saying 'I know every little thing', you could use 'I possess comprehensive knowledge of child development'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tenses ('i done early childhood Couse'), subject-verb agreement, and missing articles. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes them difficult to follow. While you attempt some complex ideas, the lack of control over basic grammar structures significantly impacts clarity. Focusing on mastering simple sentence construction and ensuring correct verb forms will help you communicate your message more accurately. Proofreading for basic errors like capitalization of 'I' and sentence endings is essential.

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