Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the vacancy for the child care in Australian magazine yesterday.

I am a student studying in healthcare administration as well as I am looking for a part time job. I have came across an advertisement about the job which require continues staying and taking care of your baby.

I have experience in personal support worker as i have work in geriatric nursing home for 6 months as well as taking care of kids during my internships.

I am kin on caring people and their needs. moreover I love to spend time with children. This is fascinated me since I was in school. This will boost my career experience and increase the credit score which ultimately help to improve my chances of getting permanent resident.

On the other hand, I spend my time doing some house hold chores and I love to make things in organised manner. So if you hire me for this job i would be able to giving you hand in house hold matters.

I am looking forward for your positive response,

Yours faithfully,

RHP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, which is a positive start. You explained your motivation, your suitability, and your plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the section on how you would spend your free time is quite brief and focuses more on household chores than on leisure activities or exploring Australia, which was the core of the prompt. To improve, ensure that each bullet point is fully expanded with specific details to demonstrate a more comprehensive response to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, and the use of paragraphs is appropriate for a formal letter. You use some cohesive devices such as 'moreover' and 'on the other hand' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. For example, the jump from discussing your career goals to household chores lacks a smooth connection. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help to elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors. For example, 'kin on caring people' should be 'keen on caring for people', and 'This is fascinated me' should be 'This has fascinated me'. Additionally, 'credit score' is likely misused here, as it usually refers to financial history rather than professional experience. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for a formal application letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. You have issues with verb tenses ('I have came across' should be 'I have come across') and sentence structure ('I have experience in personal support worker' should be 'I have experience as a personal support worker'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they often contain errors in subject-verb agreement or preposition usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and article usage.

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