Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
dear sir or madam,
i have seen the news paper in which you give advertisement to look after the six year old child .
i really like this job, beacause i m suitable for this position as i m home person and i realy like kids so that i love to spend time with them.as i m also a parents so i better know the needs of a child .moreover i know how to handle the kisds when he feel bordom .
as i live in Austraila, and when i have free time i go to park and then i play with kids. i play foot ball and cricket .. and then i realy enjoyed this thing.
its give me relaxation and in this way my leisure time spend with happiness and alot of relaxation. and i realy enjoyd this thing and feel appy and calm my mind.
moreover another free time activitie is this i go to library spend time with children i sit with them . and assist them. and in this way we become a good friends.we share thoughts and different ideas.so in this way we create healthy enviornment and become a good friend .
if you hire me for this position i never disoppinted you, and i will proved you that chossen me is your best decision .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the interest in the job, suitability, and leisure time activities. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation of suitability relies heavily on being a 'home person' and a parent, which is a bit vague. The description of free time is also somewhat repetitive, focusing on parks and libraries without providing a clear, professional tone expected in a formal application. While the task requirements are met, the depth of the response is basic, and the tone is inconsistent for a formal job application.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical. Phrases like 'in this way' are used repeatedly, which makes the flow feel unnatural. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the lack of varied linking words makes the text feel disjointed. While the overall message is clear, the progression of ideas lacks sophistication and the logical flow is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'beacause', 'realy', 'kisds', 'bordom', 'disoppinted', and 'enviornment'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on simple words like 'like', 'good', and 'happy'. There is little attempt to use more precise or professional language suitable for a job application. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to childcare and professional correspondence, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy, as these errors are frequent and noticeable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'i m also a parents'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'i realy enjoyd this thing'), and missing articles or incorrect word forms (e.g., 'i never disoppinted you'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing and capitalization errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar structures prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors.
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