Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear sir,
I am Krupa Joshi. Today, I am writing a letter to request you about the caretaker job for your six year old child. I have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine today while reading. I would like to request you for this work as I am really suitable and passionate about this job.
Firstly, I have experienced in this type of nanny jobs for more than 3 years. In addition , I have my official license and certificates related this work. Furthermore, I really appreciate if I will get this work , it will be helpful for my financial support.
Lastly, I would love to spend some time with children so I spent most of my leisure time with them in the park and garden in Australia so I easily understand their psychology and behaviour. So if I get this work I can take care of your six year old child after you left for your work.
I am waiting for your positive response.Thank you.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation, detail your suitability through experience and certification, and describe how you would spend your free time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how you would spend your free time is slightly repetitive and lacks specific detail about Australian culture or personal interests beyond visiting parks. To improve, aim to expand on your points with more descriptive detail, such as mentioning specific hobbies or interests that would make you a well-rounded companion for the family, rather than just focusing on child psychology.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'Lastly' to signal the progression of your ideas. While these are functional, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between your experience and your plans for free time feels more natural and less like a list of requirements.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'caretaker', 'passionate', 'psychology', and 'leisure time'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'request you about the caretaker job' (should be 'apply for the position of') and 'related this work' (should be 'related to this work'). To improve, focus on using more precise professional terminology and collocations suitable for a formal job application letter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have experienced in this type of nanny jobs' (should be 'I have experience in this type of nanny job') and 'I really appreciate if I will get this work' (should be 'I would really appreciate it if I were to get this position'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, though there are some spacing issues before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of conditional tenses.
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