Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam.

I hope you are in good spirits. Recently, I saw you add through the magazine that you are looking for someone who can take care of your child after you. I am currently looking for a job related to my field.

The thing is that I would really love to work as a caretaker as well as I have experience for 8 months. I want to get more into it as well I am doing a study in caregiver field. Although, I will easily handle children as it's my ability from god and before I was with a 4-year-old child for his care. His mom is a doctor and she hired me because she was my neighbor. Moreover, spending time in Australia is totally easy task for me as its my dream destination too. I will go for a walk and will explore the city in my leisure time. In addition, I wanna see a wild life of the Australia As I heard from my other friends that there is many species are threre and i want to discover it.

I will appreciate if you give me a chance for this job and I really want to takecare of your child with full honesty hope you will consider my letter once and please look in to my resume as well i will atteched it with the letter.Thank you for giving time.

Your faithfully

Karanveer

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and describing your leisure plans. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, your explanation of why you are a suitable candidate relies on anecdotal evidence rather than a professional presentation of your skills. The tone is occasionally informal (e.g., 'The thing is that...') and lacks the professional polish expected in a formal letter of application. To improve, ensure your reasons are more clearly articulated and maintain a consistent formal register throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and sentence structure. The transition between your experience and your plans for Australia is a bit abrupt. Additionally, the closing salutation 'Your faithfully' is incorrect; it should be 'Yours faithfully'. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help create a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your intentions clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'caretaker' and 'leisure time'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and minor errors, such as 'I saw you add' (instead of 'advertisement'), 'caregiver field' (instead of 'caregiving'), and 'wild life of the Australia'. There is also a reliance on basic vocabulary. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise, professional collocations and avoid informal contractions like 'wanna'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an ability to use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'I will easily handle children as it's my ability from god', 'there is many species are threre', and 'i will atteched it'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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