Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in Australian magazine for someone to live with your family for half a year and look after your six-years old child.

I would really like this job because I want to explore not only Australian culture but also cuisines. At the same time, it would be an opportunity for me to improve my communication skill by sharing thoughts and idea with each other.

I think I would be suitable for this job as i have experience in the field of home care worker and child care support centre. I am very responsible and caring person and enjoy helping children in their homework and in cooking healthy meal.

I can spend my free time in helping your family in many ways such as going out for a walk, buying groceries, shopping and taking your child to park for some activity which make your child healthy and strong.

I would really appreciate if you consider me for this position.

Yours Sincerely,

Lovejeet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt effectively. You explained your motivation for wanting the job, provided relevant details about your suitability, and described how you would spend your free time. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, when mentioning your experience in 'home care,' you could briefly describe a specific responsibility you held to make your suitability more convincing. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'At the same time' and 'In addition' (implied by structure). However, to improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and transition phrases to connect your sentences more fluidly. Some transitions feel a bit mechanical, but the overall progression of information is logical and easy to follow throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning clearly. Phrases like 'explore not only Australian culture but also cuisines' and 'responsible and caring person' are used correctly. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'six-years old child' (should be 'six-year-old child') and 'communication skill' (should be plural 'skills'). While you use some good descriptive language, incorporating more precise or sophisticated vocabulary would help elevate your score. The current range is adequate for the task but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('in Australian magazine' should be 'in an Australian magazine') and subject-verb agreement issues. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and capitalization errors, such as the lowercase 'i' when referring to yourself. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for articles and basic sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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