Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir,
I saw your advertisement in the Australian magzine for vacancy of inhoues caretaker for your six year old child.
I, Ms. Rajni is a 40 years old female citizen from India and presdntly living in sydney from past 3 years on work permit. I like this job because i love to spend time with kids. I am a mother and have experience of rearing 3 kids on my own and have diploma in art and craft. Therefore, I feel myself suitable for this job. I would like to inform that playing with kids is one of my hobby. Also, I enjoy spending my free time visiting park, cooking innovative and nutients rich recipe and reading books. Kindly look into my resume, i have enclosed with the letter. Please give a reply at abc@.com if you find me suitable for this job. I would be happy to be at your service.
Regards
Ms. RAJNI
ADDRESS
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the motivation for the job, detailing suitability, and describing free-time activities. However, the development of these points is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of suitability is brief, and the description of free-time activities lacks detail. While the tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, the content feels somewhat underdeveloped, preventing it from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should expand on your experiences and provide more descriptive details about your interests to better persuade the reader of your suitability.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is logically organized, with a clear opening and closing. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block of text. Using separate paragraphs for each bullet point would significantly improve the flow and readability. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic (e.g., 'Also', 'Therefore'). While the progression of ideas is clear, the lack of paragraphing and the limited variety of linking words restrict the score. Incorporating more sophisticated transitions would help create a smoother, more professional structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'magzine', 'inhoues', 'presdntly', and 'nutients'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. While you successfully convey your meaning, the word choices are quite simple (e.g., 'I like this job', 'playing with kids is one of my hobby'). To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more precise collocations related to childcare and professional experience, and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'living in sydney from past 3 years' (should be 'have been living in Sydney for the past three years'), 'I, Ms. Rajni is' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'one of my hobby' (should be 'hobbies'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and the use of commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently throughout the text. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and consistent punctuation will help improve your accuracy.
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