Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to discuss about the advertisement which i had recently seen in australian magazine about a care taker for your six year old child.

I love to take care of children and currently I am taking care of my niece who is four years old and she like my company. I will feel glad if i get this opportunity to explore the new country and meet new people.

I recently completed my studies in early childhood as well as I have one year experience in this field. I know plenty of tactics to handle the behaviours of kids and how to make stronger bond with them.

I am melophile person so I love music and if I will get chance, I would try to grab some knowledge about western music and beats. Moreover, I want to try some different food of Australia.

I would really appreciate if you provide me this opportunity and gain more experience in this sector.

Yours sincerely,

Pawan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining your motivation, detailing your suitability, and describing your free-time plans. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening is slightly informal. The ideas are relevant, though they could be developed further to provide a more persuasive argument. For instance, when mentioning your experience, you could provide a specific example of a challenge you overcame with a child. Overall, the response is clear and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You have used some basic cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover' and 'as well as', to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between your experience and your personal interests is smoother. Paragraphing is used correctly, which helps the reader navigate your response easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'early childhood' and 'care taker'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'discuss about' (which should be 'discuss') and 'melophile person' (which is not a standard collocation). Additionally, 'grab some knowledge' is slightly informal for this context. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise, academic, or professional collocations would enhance your score significantly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'i had recently seen' (capitalization of 'I'), 'she like my company' (subject-verb agreement), and 'if I will get chance' (conditional tense error). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent tense usage throughout your writing.

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