Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to the recent advertisement about baby-sitting opening in your house.

As a part-time PSW student, I would like to gather related experience wheather it is paid or volunteering. So, this is the best option to start with taking care of an infant for six months. It will also help me paying my tution fees. These are the reason I am applying the position.

In recent years, I had raised many kids in my family. So, I am very well aware of the diet and need of new born babies. I was also guided by my grand mother to understand a psychology and language of babbies. Therefore, I am confident about working with infants.

Although I spend a lot of time studying and reading, I spare some time to do physical excercise such as running, skipping and swimming. I also like to spend some time with my family members and relatives.

I hope this letter gave all the required information about me. Looking forward to your positive response.

Yours Sincerely,

Steve

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation, your suitability, and your plans for free time. However, there is a significant misunderstanding regarding the age of the child. The prompt specifies a 'six-year-old child', but you repeatedly refer to 'infant', 'new born babies', and 'taking care of an infant'. This inaccuracy impacts the relevance of your experience, as caring for a six-year-old requires different skills than caring for a newborn. To improve, ensure you read the prompt details carefully to align your response with the specific requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each bullet point, and a closing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'Although', and 'In recent years' are used to link sentences. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Overall, the message is easy to follow, and the progression of ideas is clear throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'part-time', 'volunteering', and 'psychology'. However, there are several spelling errors ('wheather' instead of 'whether', 'tution' instead of 'tuition', 'babbies' instead of 'babies', 'excercise' instead of 'exercise') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'baby-sitting opening in your house'. While these errors do not prevent communication, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and learning more natural collocations will help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'help me paying my tution fees' (should be 'help me pay'), 'reason I am applying the position' (missing 'for'), and 'understand a psychology' (incorrect article usage). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and preposition usage indicate a need for more careful editing. To improve, practice subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions in formal correspondence.

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