Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to look after your child. I am interested in this position due to my love for children and experience of working as an early childhood educator in my home country. I enjoy spending time with children and facilitating them with daily chores and activities. Moreover, I am open to relocate and live with your family for six months.

I am qualified for this role owing to qualifications and experience I possess. I have worked as early childhood educator at a learning centre and daycare for three years. I am trained in sensory play, emotional regulation, curriculum planning, and executive function training among children. Hence, I can look after your child's emotional and academic needs.

Apart from working, I like to indulge in outdoor activities like basketball and pickleball over the weekends

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, providing reasons for your interest, your suitability, and your plans for free time. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. For instance, the section on how you would spend your free time is very brief and lacks detail. To improve, ensure you expand on your points sufficiently to meet the length requirement and provide more depth to your explanations, which would better demonstrate your ability to communicate effectively in a professional yet personal context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover', 'Owing to', and 'Hence', to link your ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraph is abrupt, and the final paragraph is quite short, which affects the overall flow. To improve, ensure that your paragraphs are more balanced in length and use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother progression of ideas throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'early childhood educator', 'sensory play', and 'emotional regulation'. These are appropriate for the context of the letter. There are no significant spelling errors, and your word choices are generally accurate. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and less common lexical items. For example, instead of 'I like to indulge in', you could use more varied expressions to describe your hobbies and interests, which would make your writing sound more natural and engaging.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

Your grammar is generally accurate, and you use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I am qualified for this role owing to qualifications and experience I possess.' There are very few grammatical errors, and your punctuation is mostly correct. However, to achieve a higher score, you should aim to demonstrate a wider range of complex structures with greater consistency. Ensure that your sentence variety is maintained throughout the text to show a higher level of grammatical control and flexibility.

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