Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr or Mrs Pignatelli,

I hope you both are doing well. My name is Twinkal Bodala. Just a few days ago I have seen your posted advertisement regarding your quest to find a full time nanny who can live in your home and take care of your six years old child.

I am really interested to apply for this job position as I am very friendly person and I assure you I will mix with your family like a sugar mix with milk easily. Also, I have possessed relevent skills for this position such as good communication skills, conflict management skills, interpersonal skills and leadership skills. I know the skill-set look like quite professional ones but I assure you raising a child is not a cup of tea and my skills will help me to do my job better.

Currently I am a student, studying in one of the best universities of Australia namely, Trench University. I am quite exhusted with my tidious assignments and projects, I haven't been to my home in last 6 years so, I am missing my home badly. If I spend sometime with your family especially with your child, I might feel better.

I will try to focus on my subject books in my free time. Also, I have some friends who I can meet outside of your home. Please let me know as soon as possible so I can plan my upcoming tasks accordingly.

Yours faithfully,

Twinkal Bodala.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained your motivation, outlined your skills, and described your plans for free time. However, the tone is occasionally inappropriate for a formal job application. For example, the metaphor 'mix with your family like a sugar mix with milk' is overly informal and slightly confusing. Additionally, the section regarding your university studies and feeling 'exhausted' with 'tedious assignments' is somewhat unprofessional and focuses too much on your personal need for comfort rather than your suitability as a caregiver. To improve, ensure your tone remains professional and focused on the needs of the employer.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Also' and 'Currently', to transition between ideas. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition into the third paragraph. The use of 'namely, Trench University' is a bit forced. While the paragraphing is clear, the progression of ideas could be smoother if you focused more on how your skills directly benefit the child rather than listing them in a generic way. Overall, the structure is sufficient to follow your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'interpersonal skills' and 'leadership skills'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'I have possessed relevent skills' should be 'I possess relevant skills', and 'exhusted' is misspelled. The phrase 'not a cup of tea' is an idiom that is generally too informal for a formal letter of application. You should aim for more precise, professional vocabulary to describe your qualifications and intentions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I have seen your posted advertisement' (should be 'I saw'), 'six years old child' (should be 'six-year-old child'), and 'I haven't been to my home in last 6 years' (should be 'the last 6 years'). Additionally, there are punctuation issues, such as the comma splice in 'I am quite exhusted with my tidious assignments and projects, I haven't been...'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score.

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