Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement for a babysitter.

I like to take care of small children, especially toddlers, because they are naive and honest. Adjusting with them is quite difficult job as they have different kinds of nature, like some enjoy to talk with people, while others prefer to reserve, but one things I like the most about them is they are easy to convince. I personally enjoy spending time with them because I feel more confident with them.

In the past, I have worked with many families, who have multiple children and their parents are working, so that I have plenty of experience in babysitting. I even know how to cook tasty food for children and they love the food. In addition, I completed my Diploma in Healthcare, so if there are any emergencies, I will handle them professionally.

If I get a chance to come Australia for this job, I will explore the country in holidays and find more about the people. This is because, I love exploring different places and taking some photographs. While in weekdays I would continue my online education of English literature.

If you have any doubts, please feel free to ask.

Yours faithfully,

Annie.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation for wanting the job, provide relevant experience, and detail your plans for free time. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. For instance, your explanation of why you enjoy working with children is a bit repetitive and focuses on 'toddlers' rather than the six-year-old child mentioned in the advertisement. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are more specifically tailored to the context provided in the prompt. Overall, the tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'In the past', and 'This is because', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or abrupt, such as the shift between discussing your experience and your plans for free time. The referencing is generally clear, though the connection between your interest in 'toddlers' and the specific six-year-old child in the advertisement could be smoother. Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'advertisement', 'professionally', and 'emergencies'. There are some instances of slightly unnatural word choices, such as 'Adjusting with them is quite difficult job' and 'others prefer to reserve'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on collocations—for example, instead of 'adjusting with', consider 'interacting with'. You have a sufficient range to convey your meaning clearly, but more sophisticated vocabulary would be needed for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'one things I like the most' (should be 'one thing'), 'come Australia' (should be 'come to Australia'), and 'in holidays' (should be 'during the holidays'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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