Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter because I have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine regarding the need a person for take care of a six-year-old baby, and I am interested in this job.

I have been very attached to small babies since my childhood.

I believe that babies are so innocent in this world, and I see them as god. In this, I do not need to lift a weight, which would be plus point for me as well as I can get flexible hours, so I can manage my personal and professional life together.

According to me, I will be more suitable for this job because i have done a special certificate course on how to handle small babies along with that I have 9 years of experience, which makes me more suitable for this job. I have done police verification recently.

whenever I get free time, i would like to see some attractive places that are well known in Australia. Some of my family friends live there, so i would like to meet them on Saturday or Sunday.

I will wait for your positive reply,in case you need any additional information then please reach out to me on my cell number

Thank you

william

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your interest, outline your suitability through your experience and certification, and describe your plans for free time. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The explanation of why you want the job is slightly confusing, as you mention not wanting to 'lift a weight' and needing 'flexible hours,' which sounds more like a personal preference than a professional motivation for childcare. To improve, ensure your reasons for wanting the job are more focused on the role itself, such as a genuine interest in child development or cultural exchange. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be more professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'along with that' and 'whenever,' but the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition between your personal philosophy about babies and your professional qualifications is abrupt. Paragraphing is present, but the structure within the paragraphs could be tighter. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next idea.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly, such as 'advertisement,' 'professional,' and 'verification.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'attached to small babies' is slightly unnatural; 'fond of children' would be better. You also refer to the child as a 'baby' throughout, but the prompt specifies a 'six-year-old child,' which is not a baby. Using more precise terminology related to childcare and professional experience would improve your score. Some phrasing, such as 'I see them as god,' is also stylistically inappropriate for a formal job application.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'need a person for take care'), incorrect preposition usage, and inconsistent capitalization (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'). There are also errors in verb forms, such as 'need a person for take care' instead of 'need a person to take care.' While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit your score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and capitalization.

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