Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear sir/ madam,
I saw your advertisment in news are you looking for someone,who is responsible and take a charge of you child in australia. I am also living in same town and am doing studies part-time so i am almost free all the time. this job perfect fit for me.
I have almost two years of experience and I know how to handle kids propely and my timetable is also match with your schedule. However, you will receive so many resumes for this role because people have more Expertise than me. still I need job and if got this opportunity then i give my best because i have only this work and if any individual focus on one work which better then anyone else.
When i get free always I prefer to visit gardens pr parks where childrens are playing. so , every day i spent my free time around kids.
I think i am perfer match for this role if you provide me chance. I will wait for your response.
Your faithfully,
abc
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the motivation, detailing suitability, and describing free-time activities. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of suitability focuses on 'handling kids properly' but lacks specific examples of past experience. The tone is occasionally inappropriate for a formal letter to potential employers, particularly the comment about other applicants having more expertise, which undermines your professional image. To improve, focus on highlighting your strengths more confidently and ensure the tone remains consistently professional throughout the correspondence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'However, you will receive so many resumes'. Additionally, the punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent issues regarding comma placement and spacing (e.g., 'so , every day'). The flow between sentences is often disjointed, making the text feel like a series of separate statements rather than a cohesive argument. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'advertisment', 'propely', and 'perfer', which detract from the professional quality of the letter. The phrasing is often informal or awkward, such as 'take a charge of you child' instead of 'take charge of your child'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and ensure accurate spelling. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated terms related to childcare and personal attributes would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The letter contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('my timetable is also match'), missing articles ('in news', 'if got this opportunity'), and incorrect pronoun usage ('you child'). Punctuation is also a significant area for improvement, particularly the inconsistent use of commas and the lack of capitalisation at the start of sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.
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