Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to an advertisement published in an Australian magazine that says you need a caregiver for your six-year-old child for six months.

I desperately interested in this position because I love spending time with young kids since my childhood. I feel that spending time with kids enhance pleasure in life and alos reduces stress. Beyond this, I always feel young, when I am with pupils.

I have completed my masters in childcare and have huge experience to handle children in different situtions with different moods. Moreover, I am very good tutor and personally feel I would be able to help your kid in their studies by doing fun activities.

As for my free time, I believe I would try to spend some times with my extended family members and explore some beautiful destinations with them. It will be my pleasure if your family or young one accompany me to explore popular places in Australia.

I hope you will review my profile and contact me for further discussion. I am eagerly waiting for your response.

Yours faithfully,

Kamal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your motivation, detailing your suitability, and describing your free-time plans. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention having a master's degree in childcare, you could have provided more specific examples of your experience to make your application more persuasive. The letter covers the requirements well enough to be considered complete, but further elaboration on your skills and specific activities you would do with the child would have strengthened the response significantly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Beyond this', and 'As for my free time' to transition between ideas. While the flow is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the letter follows a standard formal structure. To reach a higher band, you could use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother and more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'caregiver', 'extended family', and 'destinations'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I desperately interested' (should be 'I am desperately interested') and 'enhance pleasure in life' (which sounds slightly unnatural in this context). You also use 'pupils' to refer to the child, which is slightly formal and perhaps inaccurate for a six-year-old in a home setting. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise collocations related to childcare would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I desperately interested' (missing verb 'am'), 'alos' (spelling error), 'huge experience to handle' (should be 'experience in handling'), and 'spend some times' (should be 'spend some time'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, as these are the areas where most of your slips occur.

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