Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or madam,

I would love to draw attention by writing this letter about the job advertisement which I saw on yesterday’s Australian magazine.

I have recently completed my studies in healthcare and I am looking for any job opportunities related to my course. Moreover, I am very joyful and extrovert person I love to talk to people and I love toddlers. Right now I am looking for job because I have to pay my rent, groceries as I am an international student I have to do everything by my own.

I think I will be the most suitable for this because I have already completed my study In healthcare I know how to deal with people and handle child. Moreover, I used to live with my joint family so I am good with taking care of whole family. I can do all the house hold cores as well.

In my free time I would love to read story books for toddlers because I have passion to read books of all kinds.

In addition would love to go shopping with families to help them get there thing.

I would really appreciate if you look after my resume which I have attached in this letter.

Yours faithfully,

Mahek hastapuri gauswami

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained your motivation for the job, highlighted your healthcare background as a qualification, and described your free-time activities. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why you are suitable could be more detailed, and the mention of 'paying rent' as a reason for wanting the job is slightly unprofessional for a childcare application. To reach a higher band, focus on expanding your ideas with more relevant, professional detail rather than personal financial needs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'I would love to draw attention by writing this letter'. The transition between sentences could be smoother, and some of the referencing is slightly mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'healthcare' and 'childcare'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'house hold cores' (should be 'household chores') and 'get there thing' (should be 'get their things'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and you rely on basic descriptors. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and ensure correct spelling of common terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the job advertisement which I saw on yesterday’s Australian magazine'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. For instance, 'I am very joyful and extrovert person' is missing an article, and 'I have to do everything by my own' is non-standard. These errors do not usually impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammar and article usage.

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