Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writting to show my keen interest in your posting regarding to take care of your child.

Firstly i would explain about myself i am sumit arora student of early child education and on my drop period of 6 month. currently i am looking for job and this oppournity suits me best because according to my current passion i am so dedicated regarding toddlers and that experience will count in my profile once i am back to school.

Furthermore i would like to mention, that i did lots of certifications in leisure arts so as the child is in growing age i can help to make him/her learn lot of things for instance texture art and paintings. I will attach my certifications with my resume i would really appriciate if you would have a look.

Finally,i am really clean and respectful person as this is live in position and i can easily adjust in your family. i hope you will consider my request and take necessary actions.

I am looking forward to hear from you

sumit Arora

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and mentioning your free time. However, the third bullet point regarding how you would spend your free time in Australia is missing entirely from your response. This is a significant omission that prevents a higher score. While your ideas about your education and skills are relevant, they need to be more fully developed to meet the requirements of a higher band. Ensure you read the prompt carefully to ensure every instruction is covered in your letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, you use 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Finally' to structure the letter, but the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are sometimes abrupt. There are also issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, which affects the flow of the text. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and ensure your punctuation is consistent throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. You use some relevant terms like 'early child education' and 'certifications', but there are several spelling errors, such as 'writting', 'oppournity', 'appriciate', and 'clean' (likely meaning 'neat' or 'tidy'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on using more precise vocabulary related to childcare and professional communication, and pay closer attention to spelling and word choice to ensure your message is conveyed clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'student of early child education'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I am writting'), and punctuation errors, such as the lack of spaces after punctuation marks. Additionally, some sentences are run-on or lack necessary prepositions, such as 'looking forward to hear from you' (should be 'hearing'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence punctuation.

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