Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir or madam,

I have recently seen an advertisement in an newspaper that you are looking for caretaker for your child who is only six year old.

I would like to do this job because i am studying in early childhood program at Sheridan university which gives me hands on experience to take care of children along with theoratical knowledge. Apart from this, I am perfect match with job as i have bachelor degree in Nursing from back home India which influences me to build my career in healthcare sector. Moreover, I have good knowledge of child milestone so I would plan some activity for your child which helps his gross and fine motor development. To add more , I would share my certifications of my previous experience and clean police check record for your satisfaction.

Additionally, I would share some intresting information about my hobbies as I am spending my leisure time with children by playing games , drawing pictures and teaching them. I have send all required documents for your further inquiry.

Thank you for time.

your faithfully,

Rituben

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation, highlight your relevant background in nursing and early childhood education, and describe how you would spend your leisure time. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening and closing salutations need adjustment to match the prompt's requirements. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, though the development of the third bullet point regarding free time is slightly brief. Overall, the response successfully addresses the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Apart from this', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is clear, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that the transition between your professional qualifications and your personal hobbies is smoother and that the use of cohesive devices feels more natural rather than formulaic.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'theoretical knowledge', 'gross and fine motor development', and 'healthcare sector'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'intresting' instead of 'interesting' and 'I have send' instead of 'I have sent'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your use of collocations and ensuring accurate spelling would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'I am perfect match with job' (missing articles), 'six year old' (should be 'six-year-old'), and 'Thank you for time' (missing possessive pronoun). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'I have send'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage, verb tenses, and proofreading for small errors will help improve your accuracy.

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