Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Madam,
I have seen your article on magazine for child care for six months and i am one of best candidate for this job because i love children as i am eldest son of my house. Moreover, i have lot of experience take care small kids since i have two small brothers.
Furthermore, i have international license of baby siting as well as i also have experience in daycare where many people leave their kids for play and good on outdoor activities.
On the free times when i am off from work i would like explore new places in Australia like beaches, bars and hiking trials. I also want to see kangaroos as they are tall and very playful as i have seen in televisions.
I will go in native people areas and get knowledge about there culture, historic wars and there ancester places from where they come from settle here.
thank you.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the motivation for the job, detailing suitability, and describing plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of suitability relies on personal anecdotes rather than professional depth, and the description of free time is quite brief. While the task is addressed, the tone is occasionally informal and lacks the professional polish expected in a formal application letter. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your qualifications and provide more sophisticated reasons for your interest in the position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'On the free times' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is sometimes mechanical, and the connection between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between discussing childcare experience and free time activities is abrupt. Additionally, there are some issues with referencing and sentence structure that occasionally make the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You use some relevant terms like 'child care', 'daycare', and 'outdoor activities', but there is a lack of more precise or sophisticated language. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'international license of baby siting' (should be 'certification in babysitting') and 'native people areas' (should be 'Indigenous communities'). Spelling errors, such as 'ancester' and 'televisions' (used incorrectly as a plural), also occur. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to professional experience and travel.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include missing articles ('on magazine', 'in daycare'), incorrect verb forms ('take care' instead of 'taking care'), and punctuation errors. The use of 'i' instead of the capitalized 'I' is a recurring error that affects the professional appearance of the letter. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proper article usage would be highly beneficial.
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