Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or madam,

In my recent job research in a magazine i found a job of a care giver to live with family for a half a year and take car of their six year old kid.

As currently i have been graduated from home care giver program from a university, therefore i know all the duties and work required for the job.I consider myself as a perfect option for the position.

Currently,I have many hobbies in my life.In my leisure time , I like to work on my fitness and also play soccer whenever i get the chance so that i am physically and mentally well being.I like to go on hikes to connect more with nature.Reading books gives me great pleasure as well.That is my favorite hobby.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the required points. While you have addressed all three bullet points—explaining your interest, your suitability, and your free-time plans—the ideas are underdeveloped. For instance, the explanation of your suitability is brief, and the description of your free time lacks detail regarding how these activities relate to your stay in Australia. To improve, you must expand on each point with more specific examples or context to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter lacks a clear structure. The paragraphing is inconsistent, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. While you use some basic cohesive devices like 'therefore' and 'also', the flow of the letter is disjointed. The opening and closing are not fully integrated into a standard letter format. To improve, ensure you use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more logically and improve the overall progression of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'job research' and 'take car of' (which contains a spelling error) are simplistic. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and some collocations are unnatural, such as 'perfect option' instead of 'ideal candidate'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to childcare and professional applications. Avoid repeating simple words and try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms to demonstrate a broader range of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure throughout the text. Examples include 'i found a job of a care giver' (missing articles and capitalization), 'as currently i have been graduated' (incorrect tense usage), and 'well being' (incorrect word form). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on basic grammatical accuracy, such as subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and proper capitalization of the pronoun 'I'. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures will also help improve your score.

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