Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding an advertisement which I saw last week in an Australian magazine about work of child car.

Let me explain first, actually I recently came in an Australia for my higher study due to which I am looking for a job as well as a place for temporary stay and when I saw your advertisement about care of six year old child during live with a family then I realized it become good opportunity for me. In addition, I was a student of child care program in India and I also worked in hospitals as a child support worker by which I have a lot of experience in this field. I know how to deal with children and I have many skills as well like communication, cooperation and coordination.

I would like to spend my free time for enhance my skills by continue my course.

Hope to have a positive response from your side as soon as possible.

yours faithfully,

Jaswinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation, provide relevant background regarding your childcare experience, and mention your plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is quite brief. For instance, the explanation of how you would spend your free time is limited to a single, vague sentence about 'enhancing skills.' To achieve a higher band, you should expand on these points with more specific details or examples to demonstrate a more thorough engagement with the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'In addition' and 'first,' which provide a clear structure. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical, and the transition between your background and your free-time plans is abrupt. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next, creating a more natural progression of ideas throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points clearly. You use some relevant terms such as 'child support worker' and 'cooperation.' However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'work of child car' instead of 'childcare' and 'came in an Australia' instead of 'came to Australia.' The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding basic errors in word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an ability to use simple sentence structures effectively, and your meaning is generally clear. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('an Australia'), prepositions ('in an Australia'), and verb tenses ('I recently came'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits your ability to show grammatical flexibility. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and article usage before attempting more complex structures.

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