Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my interest in looking after your six-year-old child for six months in Australia.

I would love to do this job because I have extensive past experience in babysitting. Moreover, I will spend time with your child and encourage them to take part in creative activities for their overall growth and well-being. Additionally, it would be one of the best opportunities to build healthy relationship with your children and inculcate strong professional skills for my future.

I am a suitable candidate for this job, because I am responsible, confident, disciplined and kind-hearted person. Furthermore, I have a good communication, cooperation, critical-thinking and organization skills, which would allows me to build good bonding with your child. Also, I have vast knowledge regarding childhood disease and their treatments, so I will provide them accurate care and support, while they get sick.

I have a die-heart wish to explore tourist attractions in Australia and click some beautiful pictures. If I will have more time, then I will join advanced computer course in order to getting in-depth knowledge about various IT systems and websites for my future jobs.

It would be appreciated if you could accept my request and allow me to take care of your child for six months. I look forward to your prompt response in this matter.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for the job, provided relevant details regarding your suitability, and outlined your plans for your free time. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter of application. The ideas are well-developed, particularly regarding your professional skills and your interest in exploring Australia. The response is fully focused on the task requirements, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the outset. No parts of the task were omitted, and the information provided is relevant and helpful for the potential employers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal conclusion. Each paragraph has a central theme, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You have used a variety of cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'Also' to link your ideas. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions are slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format, and the progression of ideas from your motivation to your qualifications and finally your personal plans is logical and easy to track.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, including phrases like 'inculcate strong professional skills', 'overall growth and well-being', and 'prompt response'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'die-heart wish' (should be 'die-hard') and 'accurate care' (should be 'appropriate care'). However, these do not impede communication. You attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary, which is a positive sign. To reach a higher band, focus on refining collocations and ensuring that less common words are used in the correct context, as some choices feel slightly unnatural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'which would allows me' (should be 'allow'), 'childhood disease and their treatments' (should be 'diseases'), and 'If I will have more time' (should be 'If I have more time'). Additionally, 'getting in-depth knowledge' should be 'to get in-depth knowledge'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not cause confusion for the reader. The majority of your sentences are clear and convey your meaning accurately, showing a good level of control over English grammar.

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