Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter regarding the job purpose as I saw your advertisement in an Australian Magazine.
This job location is near by my house so I is the main reason why I am interested in this job Even I also did Early Childhood Assistant Course in Australia and have four years Australia experience as well.
As, I had an Australian experience of this role. In fact, my study is fully relevant and have some volunteer experience. So I feel I completely fit in this role.
Whenever I have spare time, I usually like to go to parks or also like to do some clarity work. I love the children's company, so most of the time I like to spend their. I request you to give me a chance to proof to show my skills and take care of your children more than you.
Thank you for giving your valuable time. Waiting for your Response.
With Regards,
Teenu Walia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for interest, suitability, and plans for free time. However, the development of these points is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of why you would be a suitable person is repetitive, and the mention of 'clarity work' in your free time is unclear and lacks detail. While the tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, the content is somewhat thin, and the final sentence ('take care of your children more than you') is inappropriate and confusing in a professional context. To improve, ensure each point is expanded with specific, relevant details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which is a good start. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'Even I also did'. Some sentences are fragmented or lack logical connection to the previous ones, making the flow feel mechanical. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more smoothly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'this job' and 'do some'. There are also instances of word-choice errors, such as 'job purpose' instead of 'job vacancy' and 'clarity work', which is not a standard term. The phrasing 'take care of your children more than you' is particularly problematic as it conveys an unintended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to childcare and professional applications, and avoid repeating the same words in close proximity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'so I is the main reason', 'As, I had an Australian experience', and 'spend their' (instead of 'there'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the run-on sentence in the second paragraph. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct pronoun usage, and proofreading for basic sentence structure errors.
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