Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing to express my interest in the position of looing after your six-year-old child and living with your family for six months in Australia.

I would like this job because i love to spend time with children. I personally believe that it is the best opportunity to explore the Australia and improve my English speaking skill. I have lots of patience and i have very caring nature as well as i am very responsible person. I think these are the basic skills which are very necessary to take care of young child.

I would be a suitable person for this position because i have an experience how to take care of young child. I also know how to prepare simple meal in a day for child which is healthy for a child. I have very friendly nature so i easily make a friendship with your child and entertain him. I also know some of the activities which are good for chlidren development.

I spend my free time to go outside for walk and make a feww friends so i can communicate with them and improve my english speaking skill. Through this i can explore the Australia and get knowledge about the australian culture.

I hope you will consider my application. I look forward to hearinf from you.

Yours faithfully

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained your motivation for the job, highlighted your suitability through your experience with children and meal preparation, and described your plans for your free time. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of your experience, such as mentioning a specific age group or type of activity you have facilitated, rather than using general terms like 'some activities'. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'I also', 'because', and 'through this' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to create a more natural progression of ideas. For instance, instead of starting multiple sentences with 'I', you could vary your sentence structure to improve the overall flow and cohesion of your paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'opportunity', 'responsible', and 'development'. However, there are some spelling errors ('looing', 'chlidren', 'feww', 'hearinf') and minor word choice issues, such as 'make a friendship' instead of 'build a rapport' or 'make friends'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit your score. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you proofread your work to catch simple spelling mistakes that detract from the professional tone of your letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles (e.g., 'the Australia', 'a young child'), subject-verb agreement, and the consistent failure to capitalize the pronoun 'I'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To move to a higher band, you should focus on consistent control of basic grammar, such as article usage and capitalization, and attempt to incorporate more varied complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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