Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the job advertisement that you have posted in "The Tribune" magazine for a person who stay at your home and take care of your six year old child.

I personally love the children a lot and love to guide and play with them. I always want to get the opportunity like this which offers me to stay with family and children who have different culture than me as I am very much interested to know more about people's beliefs and nature.

As I had done early childhood educator course and have around 5 years experience, I can understand the importance and delegacy to deal with the children. I also have my own two children so I can easily understand your feelings that you want your child in safer hand.

During my leisure time, I visit to orphanage to interact with the people and we enjoy each other company a lot.

If you have any further questions please feel free to ask me.

Yours sincerely,

Sky

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your motivation, detail your suitability through your experience as an educator and a parent, and describe your leisure activities. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is slightly less conventional than the requested 'Dear Sir or Madam'. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, though they could be developed with more specific detail to reach a higher band. For example, describing your specific teaching methods or the types of activities you would do with the child would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic. Transitions between sentences are often missing or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'I'. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'early childhood educator' and 'interact'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation that slightly hinder the professional tone. For instance, 'delegacy' is not the correct word here (perhaps 'delicacy' or 'sensitivity' was intended), and 'safer hand' should be 'safer hands'. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Expanding your use of topic-specific collocations related to childcare would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I personally love the children a lot' (redundant), 'as I had done early childhood educator course' (missing articles and incorrect tense), and 'I visit to orphanage' (missing article). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage (a/an/the) and consistent verb tense application will help improve your accuracy.

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