Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in a job, which advertise in the last week magazine.

I am a babysitter professional with seven years experience. I worked in different child day care centers in the multiple states of the Australia.

I like my job because feel myself very happy to take care the beautiful innocent kids. However that job have a lot of responsibilities but due the previous my experience give me confidence and help to take care of different age group of kids. My experience based on take care of child which are in the age group of 2 years to seven years.

I m living with mom after finishing my job i spend my time with mom and she is still a working women.

I will very happy if you give me opportunity to give this job to take care of your six years old boy.

Best Regards

Alleen Christoper

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining your interest, detailing your suitability, and describing your free time. However, the response to the third bullet point is quite weak; you mention living with your mother and her working status, but you do not clearly explain how you would spend your free time in Australia as requested. The ideas are generally relevant, but the development is somewhat limited and lacks the necessary focus on the specific requirements of the prompt. To improve, ensure each bullet point is fully addressed with clear, relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter follows a basic structure, but the paragraphing is inconsistent and does not effectively separate the different ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas smoothly; for example, the transition between your experience and your personal life is abrupt. While the reader can follow the general message, the lack of logical progression and the mechanical nature of the sentences hinder the flow. Using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'take care' and 'job', which appears multiple times. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'babysitter professional' instead of 'professional babysitter' and 'working women' instead of 'working woman'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate a higher level of proficiency. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to childcare and professional experience to enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('which advertise' instead of 'which was advertised'), missing articles ('in the multiple states of the Australia'), and awkward sentence structures ('I m living with mom'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors in syntax or agreement. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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