Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am write this letter to inform you that i saw your advertisement regarding the requirement of someone who lives with your family in Austarila for takecare of the six year old child.
As am done my last course in this filed s that i will confident to do this job . Even while studying early childcare course i came to know distinct things about the childern sauvh as i will always responsible to feed the childern on proper time along with make sure the she or she well dressed everytime either in the school nor at home.
Apart from this for spending my leis sure time i try to play some indoor or outdoor games with your child which also lucreative way for their cognitive as well as physical development.
Your obediently
Amandeep Kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining the motivation, detailing suitability, and describing free-time activities. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. The content is quite brief and lacks the necessary depth for a formal letter. For example, the explanation of suitability is somewhat repetitive and lacks specific examples of experience. To improve, you should expand on your qualifications and provide more detailed, coherent descriptions of how you would spend your time in Australia to ensure you meet the length requirement and fully develop your response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organized into short paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'Apart from this for spending my leis sure time'. The paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea to improve the overall logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and there are several spelling errors, such as 'Austarila', 'filed', 'sauvh', 'leis sure', and 'lucreative'. These errors, combined with limited word choice, hinder the clarity of your message. You rely on simple phrasing, which restricts your ability to convey your suitability for the role effectively. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and attempt to use more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to childcare and professional correspondence. Expanding your range of adjectives and verbs will help you express your ideas with greater sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including subject-verb agreement issues ('I am write', 'As am done'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures ('make sure the she or she well dressed'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors that occasionally impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Reviewing the rules for present and past tense usage will also significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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