Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madam,

I am writting this letter to show my interest for the job posting in the local magazine. Recently, i have completed my diploma in house keeping and early childhood education and i have finished by internship in the realated field. I think i am the best person for this job because of my education and experience. Moreover, i am very friendly nuture and i always treat kids like my own childrens. And because of that, i received best candidate award in my recent co-up.

Furthermore, when i was in my home country, i used to provide tutor services to the youngers. I tried to make them feel comfortable with me. Secondly, along with the subjective education, i also provided them the knowledge of practical skills such as cooking, managing finance and some construction, so that they can use these skills in their future.

Even when i was free in Australia, i used to go to library and try to interacts with toddlers and try to teach some life lesson.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained your interest in the job, provided details about your qualifications and experience, and described how you would spend your free time. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, your description of how you would spend your free time is brief and slightly confusing, as you mention 'when I was free in Australia' (past tense) rather than describing your future intentions. To improve, ensure you expand on your ideas with more specific details to fully satisfy the requirements of a formal letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from your interest in the role to your qualifications and finally your free time. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Secondly' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the text is presented as a single block, which makes it harder to read. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, ensure you use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and vary your linking words to create a more natural flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'early childhood education', 'internship', and 'practical skills'. However, there are several word choice errors and inaccuracies, such as 'friendly nuture' (should be 'nurturing nature'), 'youngers' (should be 'younger children' or 'youth'), and 'co-up' (likely meant 'co-op'). These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise collocations would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include capitalization errors (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'), spelling mistakes ('writting', 'realated'), and tense inconsistencies, such as using the past tense 'was' when describing future plans in Australia. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help you improve significantly.

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