Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this letter finds you well. I saw your posting posting in newspaper regarding to look after your six-year old child. I am a student who is working on project called child Psychology and I think this oppourtunity will help alot to understand child's actions and I can utilize that in my research further.

So, I did my undergrade in "Early childhood education" which is quite relatable to this job requirements. I have been dealing with children since my high-school and this cultivated my interest towards day-care. Additionally, being with small children lately developed attachment towards them and I can understand to them very well.

Also, I usually spend my spare time with children at daycare. I am a fulltime student but enjoys company of babies.

I hope I can successfully explained my love towards children to you and looking forward to hear from your end.

Yours sincerely,

Rahul.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained your motivation (child psychology research), your suitability (undergraduate degree in Early Childhood Education), and your free time activities. However, the third bullet point regarding how you would spend your free time in Australia is under-developed; you mention spending time at a daycare, but this overlaps with your work duties rather than describing how you would explore Australia or enjoy your leisure time. To improve, ensure each bullet point is fully extended with specific details to meet the requirements of a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'Also' to connect ideas. However, the progression between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing is slightly disjointed. The transition between your academic background and your free time is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed theme to help the reader follow your argument more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'opportunity', 'utilize', and 'cultivated'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'regarding to look after' (should be 'regarding looking after') and 'developed attachment towards them' (should be 'developed an attachment to them'). There are also minor spelling errors like 'oppourtunity' and 'undergrade'. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and ensure your spelling is accurate throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. For example, 'I hope I can successfully explained' should be 'I hope I have successfully explained', and 'enjoys company of babies' lacks an article. There are also issues with preposition usage and verb tense consistency. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage to improve your accuracy.

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