Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hi mam
I am writing this letter to you because I recently seen your add on magazine and I am also looking for a job for a long time and this job is suitable for me because I did early childhood course from Sheridan college and also, I have Placement experience as well as I love to spend time with children and I know how to take care of them. I am very well to do this job, and I know how to handle the situation. I will get more experience if I do this job. I also love to spend my free time in Australia while doing this job. And it also beneficial for my carrier as well so I am looking forward to giving my experience and precious time to you. so, I am request you to update me with positive news and I am looking forward for that
thankyou
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the motivation for the job, detailing suitability, and describing plans for free time. However, the development of these ideas is quite superficial. For instance, the explanation of how you would spend your free time is limited to a single vague sentence, and the reasons for your suitability are repetitive. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on your specific interests in Australia (e.g., visiting landmarks or cultural activities) and provide more concrete examples of your childcare experience. The tone is also slightly informal for a job application, which should ideally be more professional.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which is essential for a formal letter. It is presented as a single block of text, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. While there are some basic cohesive devices used, such as 'and' and 'also', they are overused and repetitive, leading to a lack of flow. To improve, you should organize your letter into distinct paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for each bullet point, and a final closing paragraph. This would significantly improve the logical structure and readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'I am writing this letter to you' and 'I am looking forward to' are standard, but the overall range is limited. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'add' instead of 'advertisement' and 'carrier' instead of 'career'. The expression 'very well to do this job' is unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to childcare and professional communication, and ensure you are using the correct spelling for common professional terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'I recently seen' (should be 'I recently saw'), 'I did early childhood course' (missing an article: 'an early childhood course'), and 'I am request you' (should be 'I am requesting' or 'I request'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited use of complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the lack of proper sentence boundaries. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would help improve your accuracy.
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