Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you that, I am highly interested to do this job. I have seen an advertisement for baby sitter in an Australian magazine last week.

To begin with, I would like to do this job as it gives me an experience working with the children. Moreover, I have qualification as an caregiver with 3 years of experience in this field. Furthermore, I have also worked in the retirement residence for almost 2 years as a caregiver. I hope it would be helpful to you in the hiring process. If I will get this job then I would spend my free time going out for shopping and beaches in Australia and one of my friend also lives there. So, I can also meet them once a week. if you need any further information then I can provide you further details.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Your's sincerely,

Riddhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your interest in the job, provide details about your suitability as a caregiver, and describe how you would spend your free time. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the section on your suitability could be expanded with more specific examples of your childcare duties rather than just listing your experience. Additionally, the tone is slightly inconsistent; while it is polite, it lacks the professional yet warm tone typically expected in a formal application letter. To improve, ensure each point is fully extended with relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is generally clear. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link your sentences. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The referencing is mostly clear, although the sentence 'one of my friend also lives there' is slightly awkward in its placement. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help elevate the flow of your writing. Overall, the structure is sufficient for the task.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'advertisement', 'qualification', and 'caregiver'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'interested to do this job' should be 'interested in doing this job', and 'qualification as an caregiver' is grammatically incorrect. You also use 'baby sitter' as two words, whereas 'babysitter' is the standard form. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used in the correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I am highly interested to do this job' (should be 'in doing'), 'I have qualification as an caregiver' (missing article/incorrect usage), and 'If I will get this job' (incorrect conditional structure; should be 'If I get'). Additionally, there is a punctuation error in the closing: 'Your's sincerely' should be 'Yours sincerely'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a need for more careful proofreading of basic grammar rules.

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