Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/Madam

I have seen your advertisement in the Australian magazine that you are looking for someone to live with your family and look after your six-year old child

I would like this job because I think that I would be best for this job and I want to study Australian culture and community I also want to learn english language all these concerns of mine are best suited by living with your family I can learn english language and see the Australian daily routine that how the life runs in Australia

I would be best suitable for this job because I have a lot of experience of keep caring of my family childrens I would not only keep care of him but also help him in his homework and study and also made simple meal for him I would never be angry in any unexpected situation

yours faithfully

Shanawar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining your motivation, detailing your suitability, and mentioning your free time. However, the third bullet point regarding how you would spend your free time is entirely missing from your response. This is a significant omission that prevents the task from being fully addressed. While your ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. To improve, ensure you explicitly cover every instruction provided in the prompt. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the lack of information regarding your leisure activities significantly impacts your score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes the text appear as a single block. While there is a basic logical flow from the introduction to your qualifications, the lack of cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition') makes the writing feel disjointed. The sentences are often run-on or lack proper punctuation, which hinders the reader's ability to follow your train of thought easily. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each new topic and incorporate linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is functional but quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'keep caring of' and 'best suited' are used in a way that sounds unnatural. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and some collocations are incorrect, such as 'keep caring of my family childrens' (should be 'caring for my family's children'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to childcare and cultural exchange, and focus on using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including missing articles ('the Australian magazine', 'the English language'), incorrect verb forms ('made simple meal'), and punctuation issues. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence construction. For example, 'I would not only keep care of him but also help him in his homework' is a good attempt at a complex structure, but it is marred by the incorrect phrasing 'keep care of'. Improving your control over basic sentence structure and punctuation is essential.

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