Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir/Madam

I seen advertisement in magazine about to tack care of your six years old child. I liked to be joint your family as a child care taker.

I have qualification as child care and even hospitality.I have more then 7 years experience as well. Even I had worked for 3 years at child care center too.

I am glade to say that I can give my best to take care of your child like as my child.Even I am also very friendly so not to worry about my nature. you can check my background as well.

I am always used to work with honesty.Even I am good cook too so I can make many different types of food that your child can like. I know its not easy to take care of your child with work and with your besy scadual.You can trust me.I can do my best.

Thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. The writer explains their desire for the job, provides details regarding their qualifications and seven years of experience in childcare and hospitality, and mentions spending free time enjoying cooking and ensuring a trustworthy approach. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and basic. While all parts are addressed, the explanations lack extension and depth, which places the response securely at Band 5.0 according to the task achievement descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing, with ideas clumped together rather than separated into logical sections for each prompt requirement. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and cohesive devices are either missing or used inadequately and repetitively, such as the frequent repetition of the word 'Even'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear. Although the overarching message of the letter can be understood, the structural organization and lack of clear paragraphing require a Band 4.5 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'seen' instead of 'saw', 'tack' instead of 'take', 'glade' instead of 'glad', and 'besy scadual' instead of 'busy schedule'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task. Less common lexical items are not attempted successfully, meaning the response fits the Band 4.0 descriptors closely due to errors that occasionally strain the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing relies heavily on simple sentence forms, and attempts at more complex structures are consistently faulty or unnatural, such as 'I liked to be joint your family' and 'I am always used to work with honesty.' There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including tense errors ('I seen') and missing articles, which frequently cause difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to the Band 4.0 level for grammatical range and accuracy.

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