Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am wrting this letter to inform you that i recently seen a advertisment saying you need a induvidual for six months to live with your family also to take care your little 6 years old child. I would like to inform you that i am keen interested in this job, as i am a proffesonial health care aid certified from government.
It is my hobbie to look after familys as well as kids as i love playing and talking with them. I can perform all duties that needed to care someone. I can cook food, wash laundry, helping in shower, shopping, taking care of medicines, etc. In my leasure time while i am in australia i usally visit parks in evening to meet elder people feeling alone. Sometime's in liberary to read books related to human behaviour, gym for exercise and ceniplex on weekends to enjoy movies. If you want my services you can contact me at my office number 573xxxx. I hope we will meet soon.
Take care
skr
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. The writer explains their interest in the job by stating they are 'keen interested' and a certified healthcare aide, details their suitability through relevant caregiving experience and domestic duties, and mentions how they plan to spend their free time by visiting parks, libraries, the gym, and cinemas. However, the tone fluctuates slightly towards the end with informal phrases like 'Take care' and the sign-off 'skr', which detracts from the formal convention of a letter starting with 'Dear Sir or Madam'. Furthermore, some ideas are presented simply without deeper elaboration. Therefore, the response fulfills the task requirements reasonably well, earning a solid Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter exhibits a coherent overall arrangement, and information is generally logically sequenced. The writer moves from stating the purpose of the letter to qualifications and duties, and finally to leisure activities and contact information. However, paragraphing is poorly managed, as the entire body of the letter is compressed into a single, dense block of text, making it harder to follow. Cohesive devices are also limited and sometimes repetitive (e.g., overusing 'and' and commas in lists such as 'cooking food, wash laundry, helping in shower, shopping, taking care of medicines, etc.'). Referencing is mostly clear, but the lack of paragraph breaks limits the coherence and lowers the score for this criterion to Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, though it contains notable spelling errors and limitations. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'proffesonial health care aid', 'induvidual', and 'leasure', but these contain spelling mistakes. Other vocabulary choices are basic or slightly unnatural, such as 'keen interested' instead of 'keenly interested', and 'wash laundry' instead of 'do the laundry'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, the persistent spelling and word-choice errors place this response at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as the relative clause in 'parks in evening to meet elder people feeling alone'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense and agreement issues like 'i recently seen a advertisment' and 'you need a induvidual'. There are also problems with parallel structure in lists, such as 'cook food, wash laundry, helping in shower'. Punctuation is faulty in places, notably with missing capitalisation for pronouns and proper nouns like 'i' and 'australia'. These errors occasionally distract the reader, leading to a Band 5.0 for grammatical range and accuracy.
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