Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing here to enquiry related the job.

I have interest in this job. Because I am a Physiotherapist. I have been working in the hospital and clinic also. I have seen a lot of patients even children, elderly also. I have many skills such as feeding, cooking, playing. When I arrive in australia. I also take an admission in navy course. It is about 2 year course. I know the procedure. For instance such as handling the child, how to laugh, how to take care, play with the child. Furthermore, I know how to encourage him in many activities.

In addition, as I have knowledge of milestones. They are very important for child development.

In my free time, I have always spending in productive things such as Crochetting, Knitting, Stitching.

I believe I am suitable for this job. I believe you will consider me. I am very thankful to you.

Yours Faithfully,

Rajandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task prompt, addressing why you would like the job, detailing why you are a suitable candidate through your physiotherapy background and childcare experience, and briefly mentioning how you would spend your free time in Australia. However, some ideas lack full extension and development, particularly the explanation regarding your free time, which is somewhat abrupt and focuses heavily on crafting activities without linking them broadly to life in Australia. Additionally, the greeting 'Dear Sir' does not match the prompt's instruction to address the parents or the opening line 'Dear Sir or Madam,' though the communicative purpose is still achieved. These elements place the response firmly at Band 6, as all bullet points are addressed but some parts remain under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the letter logically into introduction, body, and conclusion. However, paragraphing is poorly managed; the main body is compressed into a single, somewhat disjointed block of text rather than being broken into logical paragraphs for each prompt requirement. Cohesive devices are frequently faulty or mechanical, as seen in repetitive sentence starters like 'I have' and disjointed transitions such as 'When I arrive in australia. I also take an admission in navy course.' Referencing and referencing links are occasionally unclear, leading to a choppy reading experience. Overall, the organizational structure aligns best with a Band 5 due to the inadequate paragraphing and mechanical cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey basic professional details such as being a 'Physiotherapist' and understanding 'milestones' for 'child development'. However, the vocabulary is often limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic verbs and nouns. There are noticeable word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'enquiry related the job' instead of 'inquiring about the job' and 'take an admission in navy course'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical inaccuracies constrain the score to a Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response displays a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as fragment sentences ('Because I am a Physiotherapist.'), incorrect prepositions ('in the hospital and clinic also'), and tense confusion ('I have always spending in productive things'). Punctuation is also problematic, with improper sentence splitting ('For instance such as handling the child, how to laugh, how to take care, play with the child.'). While basic meaning is usually recoverable, these persistent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect the Band 5 descriptors for grammatical range and accuracy.

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