Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir,
I have seen your advertisement in a magazine you are looking for to live with you for taking care of your six-year old child.
I would like to apply for this job because right now I am here in Australia for six month also looking for place to live where I can feel like home.
Secondly I can take care of your child properly beacause I have long experience at working as children day care in my local area. Also I love be across with the children because it relax my mind playing with babies as well nourishing child.
As I am here in Austarlia for six months in my free time I would like explore the local area and doing some outdoor activities.
At last I just want to say please consider my for this job as I have aloso baby at home I would properly look after your child.
Regards,
Ram
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The candidate has attempted all parts of the prompt, successfully covering why they want the job, providing details of their suitability through past experience, and stating how they would spend their free time in Australia. However, some bullet points are relatively brief and underdeveloped. For example, the reason for wanting the job is slightly circular, stating they are looking for a place to feel like home because they are here for six months. Similarly, the description of free time is quite basic. While the tone is appropriate for a letter of application, the overall development of ideas corresponds best to a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear beginning and ending. The writer uses basic cohesive devices and sequencing markers such as "Secondly" and "Also", although transitions are sometimes mechanical or abrupt. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas could be improved; for instance, the body paragraphs run together ideas about experience, personal feelings, and free time rather than separating them into distinct topical units. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun use in "please consider my for this job". These features place the response firmly at a Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic concepts such as "advertisement", "experience", and "outdoor activities". However, the range is limited and there are notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as "children day care" instead of 'childcare' or 'daycare', and "love be across with the children" which impedes natural expression. Spelling errors like "beacause" and "Austarlia" also occur. The vocabulary choices are generally basic and repetitive, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak throughout. There are frequent structural errors, missing prepositions, and tense inconsistencies. Examples include "you are looking for to live with you" (incorrect complement structure), "right now I am here in Australia for six month" (singular/plural noun error), and "please consider my for this job". These errors frequently cause strain for the reader and prevent the grammar from reaching a higher band. The overall control is representative of a Band 5.0.
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