Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dera parents,

I am writing to express my intrest in joining your family to look after the six year old child for six -months.I am really excited to come and visit the place and experience the culture while providing caring support to your family.

I would love this job as I like to spend time with kids and offer positive influence to the childs life. I believe I am patient, responsible and enthusiastic about helping childrens growth, learning and their food habits. Furthermore, I have previous 5 years experience in babysitting and have completed a child care course which help me to gain knowlege in fun activities, recreational and educational activities can be given to kids.I also achieved a masters in food and nutrition managements in children, where I got adequate information regarding the nutrious and healthy food can be given to children.

While I am in Australia, I would spend time by visiting musuem or go for a walk to the nearest park or community centres. I would enjoy reading bookd and also intrested in sports activities where I like to participate in community activities and to get know more about the culture.

Thank you for considering my appalication. I am looking forward to join your family as soon as possible and contribute positively during my stay.

Your Sincerely

Marina

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task instructions. The candidate explains why they want the job by stating they like spending time with kids and want to experience the culture. Suitable qualifications and experience are detailed, including five years of babysitting, a child care course, and a master's degree in food and nutrition management. Finally, the candidate outlines how they would spend their free time visiting museums, walking in parks, reading books, and participating in community activities. Although there is an opening salutation mismatch with the prompt instruction (the prompt asks for 'Dear Sir or Madam,' while the candidate wrote 'Dera parents'), the communicative purpose of the letter is fully achieved. Ideas are clearly presented and supported.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter features clear logical organisation with paragraphs dedicated to distinct parts of the prompt, such as motivation, qualifications, and free-time plans. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, such as 'Furthermore' and 'While I am in Australia'. However, referencing and paragraph flow can occasionally feel slightly mechanical, and there are some awkward transitions between sentences, such as 'educational activities can be given to kids.' Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the text logically, leading to an overall coherent arrangement throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The candidate demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating topic-specific terms such as 'recreational and educational activities', 'nutritious and healthy food', and 'community activities'. There are some spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'intrest' instead of 'interest', 'childs' instead of 'child's', 'childrens' instead of 'children's', 'knowlege' instead of 'knowledge', 'appalication' instead of 'application', and 'musuem' instead of 'museum'. Despite these lapses, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning without impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'I am writing to express my interest in joining your family to look after the six year old child for six-months.' There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips throughout the text, including incorrect hyphens, missing apostrophes ('childs', 'childrens'), subject-verb agreement issues like 'activities can be given', and minor preposition errors. However, these errors rarely impede communication, and the writer demonstrates good control over basic sentence structures.

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