Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to discuss about your requirement.I read the advertisement you gave in the magazine.
I have learnt that you are looking for a babysitter for your child. Since, I love babies , this job is for me. I also struggling to find the job, So it is going to be helpful for me to cope up with my day to day endeavours.
I find myself very comfortable with the babies specially around newborn to 4 years babies. And I am going to do some stuff apart from babysitting. I am also gets familier with anyone so you do not have to be shy around me.
In free time, I would like to go in the park and meditate. Moreover, I am an athlete, do some calisthenics and exercises and also play some sports such as volleyball and football.
I will be thankful to you, if you hire me as your babysitter and give me opportunity to work with cute children.
Yours faithfully,
Mustakim.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the prompt, though the development is somewhat basic. You explained why you want the job by stating that you love babies and need to find employment to cope with your day-to-day endeavours. You also provided details about why you are suitable, mentioning your comfort with young children, and outlined how you would spend your free time by visiting the park, meditating, and doing athletic activities like calisthenics, football, and volleyball. However, the explanation regarding the age of the child in the advertisement (a six-year-old) slightly contradicts your mention of being comfortable with newborn to 4-year-old babies. Despite this minor detail, all bullet points are addressed, leading to a Band 6.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter has a coherent overall arrangement, and the paragraphs generally follow the structure of the prompt requirements. You used some basic cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover' and 'Since', to link your ideas. However, paragraphing is somewhat fragmented, with several very short paragraphs that disrupt the flow of the letter. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as the sudden shift to discussing your athletic activities without linking them back smoothly to your stay in Australia. Overall, the organization is clear enough for the reader to follow, satisfying the requirements for Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but it tends to be basic and repetitive. You attempted some less common words and phrases, such as 'day-to-day endeavours', 'calisthenics', and 'meditate', which show an effort to expand your lexical range. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'discuss about your requirement' (instead of 'discuss your requirements'), 'I also struggling' (missing a verb), 'gets familier with' (informal and misspelt), and 'go in the park' (instead of 'go to the park'). These inaccuracies restrict the score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You utilized a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and subordinate clauses introduced by 'Since' and 'if'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including missing auxiliary verbs ('I also struggling'), incorrect verb forms ('I am also gets familier'), and missing punctuation or incorrect capitalization in places. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Therefore, this performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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