Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to apply for the job that you posted in an Australian magazine.

I hope this letter finds you well. I would love to have this job because I want to experience life in Austrailan and learn about your culture, also I love to spending time with children and helping them to learn and grow every day.

I believe that I am a good perosn for this opprotunity due to my two years of experience in babysitting children aged five to seven so I know how to keep them safe, assist them with basic learning. and plan fun games even I always be patient, responsible, and friendly.

As I am in my learning age, I do planing to have short time course in early childhood assistant course which not only help me to get more deeply knowledge about children but also inculcate me several skills to deal with toddlers.

Thank you for your time and looking forward for positive response.

Regards,

Amandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all three bullet points required in the task prompt. You successfully explained your motivation for wanting the job (experiencing Australian culture and spending time with children), provided details of your suitability (two years of babysitting experience with children aged five to seven), and outlined how you would spend your free time (taking a short early childhood assistant course). The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to parents, although the greeting 'Dear Sir or Madam' is slightly formal for a family advertisement, it is acceptable as it matches the prompt instruction. All parts of the prompt are addressed, and ideas are sufficiently developed for a Band 6.5 or Band 7 response. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly more on your future plans or the specific types of games you play with children.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organised with a clear beginning and ending. Each body paragraph focuses on a distinct prompt requirement: paragraph two explains the desire for the job, paragraph three details suitability, and paragraph four discusses free time plans. Paragraphing is used appropriately. However, cohesion at the sentence level is occasionally faulty or run-on, such as in the third paragraph where multiple clauses are joined with coordinating conjunctions ('...safely, assist them with basic learning. and plan fun games even I always be patient...'). Referencing and transitions between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, successfully conveying your meaning. You attempted some less common words and phrases, such as 'express my interest', 'inculcate me several skills', and 'early childhood assistant course'. However, there are notable spelling and word-choice errors that detract from the overall quality, such as 'Austrailan' (Australian), 'perosn' (person), 'opprotunity' (opportunity), and 'deeply knowledge' (deep knowledge). Furthermore, phrases like 'inculcate me several skills' are unnatural in this context. These lexical slips place your performance solidly in the Band 6 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms throughout the letter, such as the relative clause in 'the job that you posted' and the conditional/subordinate structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes that recur. For example, there is a comma splice and run-on sentence structure in the third paragraph ('...basic learning. and plan fun games even I always be patient...'). Other errors include 'I want to experience life in Austrailan and learn about your culture, also I love to spending time' (incorrect gerund form after 'love to' and run-on comma usage) and 'do planing to have short time course' (verb tense and article omission). These errors occasionally impede smooth reading.

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