Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Dear sir/mam
Subject:Regarding job hiring
I hope you find this letter well, I want to say that I am a certified ECE willing to work with you, unhappy to take care of your six-year-old child further, I have experience in this field from like five years so I think I'm suitable for this job. Thus I am Phone to travel a new country so it's better for me to work and travel there.
I hope hearing from you soon.
Your faith faithfully
Yogesh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student has attempted all parts of the task by mentioning why they want the job, their suitability due to experience, and their plans for free time. However, the response is severely underdeveloped due to its extreme brevity, containing only 83 words, which falls well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. This major shortfall directly impacts task fulfillment. Furthermore, some information is garbled and unclear, such as the phrase 'unhappy to take care of your six-year-old child', which appears to be a major typographical or translation error that distorts the intended meaning. Because the content is minimal and fails to properly expand on the bullet points, this performance aligns closely with a Band 4.0 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing, as the entire body of the text is condensed into a single block beneath the salutation. Cohesive devices are minimal, relying on simple connectors like 'Thus' to link ideas. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the overall structural layout does not reflect standard letter-writing conventions. Referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow a logical train of thought. While there is a basic attempt to sequence the reasons for applying and personal background, the lack of cohesive control and paragraph structure restricts this section to a Band 4.0 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student attempts some less common terms like 'certified ECE', but this is overshadowed by severe lexical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Phone to travel' instead of 'keen to travel'. Additionally, the greeting 'Dear sir/mam' is overly informal and incorrect for the requested formal prompt. Word choices lack precision and collocation awareness. Although the message is occasionally decipherable, the frequent lexical inaccuracies and limited range mean the response fits the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and poorly constructed compound sentences. There are frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence boundary demarcation, such as run-on sentences ('Thus I am Phone to travel a new country so it's better for me to work and travel there'). Grammatical control is weak, and basic verb forms and modifiers are frequently misused. These persistent errors cause strain for the reader and reflect a level consistent with Band 4.0.
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