Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Shubham Savaliya. I hope you are doing well. I have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine regarding an employment to live with a family for six months and look after their child. I would be grateful, if I get a chance to do a job.

I would like to do a job because of several reasons. I am a final year university student. So, if I get a change to do job then it will be beneficial to make my resume stronger. Additionally, I wll get enough experience in handling the tough situation, which would be able to teach me that how to survive in any bad situation. Moreover, I prefer to do job in initial stage of the career because it really helpful in future, when there will be the time to start any private business.

I believe that I am very suitable for this job role because of my advanced skills. I can handle the children very calmly. In addition, I have a better communication skill, understanding power, interpersonal skill, and understanding of a situation. I will be able to grow your child very sofly without disppointing you. Apart from that, I have a patience in any situation, whether it is in my favour or not.

I will do my normal working at your home in Australia. In my leisure time, I would go for some amusement park, shopping malls, and visit some beaches there. Additionally, I will do my extra study work in that time. If you will require any help in household work then I would be grateful to do it by myself.

Thank you for giving me this opportunity. I am waiting for your response regards to this opportunity.

Yours sincerely,

Shubham Savaliya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The candidate has covered all parts of the task prompt adequately. The letter begins appropriately, and the student successfully explains the desire for the job, provides details about why they are suitable such as having calming skills and patience, and outlines plans for free time like visiting amusement parks and beaches. However, some of the ideas are slightly repetitive and under-developed, particularly the reasons for wanting the job, which lean heavily on general CV building rather than genuine interest in childcare or cultural exchange. The tone is mostly polite and suitable for a general task, earning a solid Band 6.0 performance under the task achievement descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific aspect of the prompt. There is an overarching logical structure starting with an introduction, moving to reasons for applying, suitability, free time, and a polite closing. Cohesive devices are utilized, such as 'Additionally,' 'Moreover,' and 'Apart from that,' though they can occasionally feel mechanical or formulaic. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to group ideas logically, and referencing throughout the text is generally clear. Minor awkwardness in transitional phrasing keeps this at a Band 6.0 level rather than higher.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items such as 'interpersonal skill,' 'initial stage,' and 'leisure time.' However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'regarding an employment' instead of 'employment opportunity,' 'do a job' instead of 'take on a job' or 'work,' and 'grow your child' instead of 'raise your child' or 'look after your child.' Spelling is generally accurate, but the lexical range lacks flexibility and precision, placing it firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, deserving a 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional clauses ('So, if I get a change to do job then it will be...'). There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, including missing articles ('do a job', 'in initial stage'), incorrect prepositions ('regards to' instead of 'regarding'), and minor punctuation or tense issues ('I wll get', 'I have a patience'). Although these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede overall communication, allowing the reader to follow the intended meaning. This fits the Band 6 descriptor well.

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