Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to express my interest in role of a care taker for your 6 year child as per the advertisement posted in the weekly Australian magazine.

I am looking for a full time job closer to my home place and your address is just 5 minututes walk away which makes commmute easy.Therby, suits my needs and saves unecessary travel to farther areas.

As far as my qualifactions are concerned, I am a certified early childhood educator from a renowed institute with distinction. Moreover, I am an experienced candidate who have worked with children of almost all age groups and my specialization is much more efficient in age groups between 6-9 years. Additionally, skilled to be patient, joyful, motivating and inspiring around children.Therefore, this would be a perfect fit for me and i would love to work with your child.

Inorder to spend my free hours when in Australia, I would insist to have a weekend off as to keep my self in touch with my family and friends.We usually have a weekend get together to keep each other updated feel refreshed and joyous after the hectic week goes by and be prepared for the following one.

I hope I would be the best candidate to fit all your requirements. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Thanking you,

Yours Sincerely,

Harnaj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, successfully explaining why you want the job, detailing your suitability, and describing how you would spend your free time. However, some areas are developed more fully than others. For instance, the explanation of your suitability through your early childhood education background is well covered, but the explanation regarding your free time focuses mainly on having a weekend off to see family and friends rather than broader activities you might enjoy in Australia. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and all bullet points from the prompt are covered, fitting comfortably into the expectations for this level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear beginning and ending, using standard conventions such as 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours Sincerely'. Paragraphing is used to separate different ideas, moving logically from your interest in the role to your qualifications and finally your free time plans. However, cohesion at times feels a bit mechanical or faulty. Certain linking words and transitional phrases, such as 'Therby', 'Therefore', and 'Inorder', are misused or incorrectly combined with punctuation, which affects the smooth progression of ideas. Referencing and paragraph transitions could be strengthened to make the flow more natural throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

An adequate range of vocabulary is used for the task, successfully conveying your meaning to the reader. You make noticeable attempts to use less-common lexical items related to childcare and employment, such as 'certified early childhood educator', 'specialization', and 'distinction'. However, there are several spelling, word choice, and word form errors that occasionally distract, such as 'care taker' instead of 'caretaker', 'minututes', 'unecessary', 'qualifactions', and 'renowed' instead of 'renowned'. Despite these slips, communication is not severely impeded, and the vocabulary remains minimally sufficient to handle the communicative requirements of the prompt.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as relative clauses and participial phrases. There are some errors in grammar and punctuation throughout, but they rarely impede communication. Examples of grammatical issues include article omissions and verb agreement errors, such as 'interest in role of a care taker' missing an article, '6 year child' instead of '6-year-old child', and 'an experienced candidate who have worked' where the verb does not agree with its antecedent. Additionally, punctuation around conjunctions and introductory phrases needs better control. A broader mix of error-free complex sentences and more precise punctuation would elevate this aspect.

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