Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir/madam

I hope this letter finds you well.

I have seen an advertisemnet in an Australian magazine for emplyees. I am interset in this job as I have three years of a daycare experience. Moreover, I love to spend my time with children and they also love me.According to me, my experience and love toward kids make me a suitable person to employ.

I am requesting, please once consider me and give opportunity, you would feel proud on our decision. Therefore, since, I have child care experience, I know how to spend leisure time in valuable way. I would like to go outdoor to play games which helps to live physical fit.

I would really appreicate, if you can give me chance to become a employ.

I am looking forward to your prompt response and hope you consider my request.

Yours faithfully

parminder singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the three requested points: you explain your interest in childcare, mention three years of daycare experience, and say you would play outdoor games in your free time. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because these ideas are brief and some details are unclear. For example, “I love to spend my time with children” gives a reason for applying, but you could explain what you enjoy about caring for them. Your suitability is supported mainly by experience and affection, with little detail about relevant skills or responsibilities. The free-time plan is also limited. The response is five words below the required minimum, which contributes to the task being underdeveloped. Add specific examples and complete each point more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the advertisement, explain your interest and experience, describe a free-time activity, and close with a request. This gives the reader a basic sense of purpose. However, the ideas are crowded into a few paragraphs, and the progression is not always clear. “I am requesting, please once consider me” and “Therefore, since” create awkward links rather than showing a clear relationship between ideas. The transition from your childcare experience to outdoor activities also needs a clearer explanation. Use separate paragraphs for your application, suitability, and plans in Australia, and connect each point with straightforward linking phrases. This would make the letter easier to follow without relying on repeated requests.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “daycare experience,” “children,” “leisure time,” and “play games.” There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “I am looking forward to your prompt response.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less natural. For instance, “love toward kids” and “feel proud on our decision” do not express your ideas idiomatically, while “a employ” is an incorrect form. Spelling errors such as “advertisemnet,” “interset,” and “appreicate” are noticeable. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for describing childcare skills, motivation, and leisure plans, and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use mostly simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to combine ideas using “as,” “which,” and “since.” These attempts show some range, but the structures are often faulty or awkward. For example, “I have three years of a daycare experience” has problems with article use and the construction of the experience phrase, while “which helps to live physical fit” has an unclear subject and an incomplete grammatical pattern. The request “I am requesting, please once consider me” also combines structures incorrectly. Punctuation and spacing need attention, as in “me.According.” Practise accurate sentence patterns for explaining experience and making polite requests, then check articles, clause structure, and sentence boundaries.

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