Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir or madam

I am writing this letter regarding an advertisement to take care your six year old toddler.

I would really appricate it if you could accept my letter, because I love this job. I love to play with children and take care their little things such as meals, homework and playing in park that make my job more interesting.

I believe that I would be the best suitable person for this job, because I lived last five years in Australia and I completed my PSW course which is related to child care and health. Also, I have three year expericed in this field and attched my all work detailes at end of this letter.

At my leisure time, I would spent time either with my family or at work place.

For my family we will go for movie night, picnic and explore new resturants and professional time i would love to spent time with my kids because i worked as personal assistant worker in different houses.

I would accept that you are consider my application and free to contact me any time

your faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that you enjoy working with children, mention your childcare-related course and experience, and describe possible activities in Australia. These details make the letter relevant. However, some ideas are only briefly stated or unclear. For example, “I would be the best suitable person” is not supported with a specific example of how your experience would help care for a six-year-old. Your free-time plans are also confusing because “either with my family or at work place” does not clearly explain what you would do outside work. Develop each point with a concrete detail, and make your suitability and leisure plans unambiguous.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a basic paragraph structure, with separate sections for your interest, qualifications and free-time plans, so the reader can identify the main topics. However, progression is uneven and some links between ideas are unclear. The paragraph beginning “At my leisure time” shifts from family activities to spending time with children at work, which makes the relationship between the ideas difficult to follow. Linking words such as “because” and “also” are used, but the connections sometimes feel repetitive or do not clarify the logic. Use one paragraph for each task point, order details clearly, and use references such as “these experiences” to connect supporting information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “child care,” “homework,” “picnic,” and “personal assistant worker.” This gives the reader a general understanding of your experience and plans. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts less clear, such as “appricate,” “expericed,” “detailes,” and “resturants.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “take care their little things” and “professional time.” Choose more precise expressions for childcare duties and leisure activities, and check spelling carefully. A wider range of accurate phrases would help you explain your qualifications and plans more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “because” and “Also,” and the main message is usually understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction. Examples include “I would spent time,” “I lived last five years,” and “I would accept that you are consider my application.” The sentence about leisure time also joins several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise accurate past and conditional forms, and build longer sentences from a clear main clause with correctly formed supporting clauses. Careful punctuation and sentence-by-sentence proofreading would improve readability.

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