Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

Hoping you are doing well. i am writing this letter because I read this news in my Australian magazine on this morning, while you need one caregiver for you child so I eager to know about myself because I am perfectly fit this position.

Actually, right now I am in australia and i found same kind of job and I utilize my time in job so I like this job and I really like small children.

I think i am perfectly match with this job because I am nurse and I had 2 years of cargiver experience in Australia previously, and i know what kind of care is needed your childeren and how i manage everything while you are not present at home and so on, as well as I am living with my friend and now she is going to canada so I also look new appartment and my job so I do not have any problem of living with you and take care your children and i spend also my free time of playing with your children and going shopping in australia.

If you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Your Sincerely,

kajal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three requested points: you say you want the role because you enjoy working with children, describe nursing and previous caregiving experience, and mention shopping and spending time with the child in your free time. However, the reasons are brief and sometimes unclear, so the task is only partly developed. For example, “I utilize my time in job” does not clearly explain your motivation, and “I spend also my free time of playing with your children” does not give much detail about your plans in Australia. Add specific examples of childcare duties or relevant skills, and explain one or two personal interests you would pursue outside work. A more direct, consistently clear explanation would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a basic structure, with an opening, paragraphs about your interest and suitability, and a closing. The reader can generally follow the main points, but progression is uneven: the second paragraph repeats your interest in the job, while the long third paragraph combines your qualifications, housing situation, childcare plans, and leisure activities. Linking phrases such as “Actually,” “as well as,” and “so” are used repeatedly and do not always show the relationship between ideas clearly. Separate the suitability details from your living arrangements and free-time plans, and use clearer transitions such as “In addition” or “Outside work.” This would give the information a more logical sequence and make the letter easier to read.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “caregiver,” “nurse,” “experience,” and “children,” so the reader can identify your background and intentions. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “read this news in my Australian magazine,” “perfectly match with this job,” and “look new appartment.” Spelling errors, including “childeren” and “cargiver,” also make the writing less clear and polished. Build a wider set of phrases for describing childcare skills, motivation, and leisure activities, and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions would help you communicate your suitability with less effort for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences joined with words such as “because,” “and,” and “while.” However, the longer structures are often faulty, and frequent errors can make parts of the letter difficult to understand. For example, “while you need one caregiver for you child” has an unclear clause and incorrect possessive form, while “I know what kind of care is needed your childeren” is missing a grammatical link. There are also problems with capitalization and sentence boundaries, as in “i am in australia.” Practise forming shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas accurately. Review articles, possessives, verb forms, and punctuation.

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