Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I just saw an advertisement regarding job for a care taker for your six-year-old child, who also live with your family. I love spending time with children, as they have pure sole. Moreover, I am kind of person, who can spend their whole life to look after children and care them.

I am a responsible person as well as I can understand the emotions of children. Furthermore, I have worked as a nersary teacher earlier for 2 years, so I can handle them effortlessly.

As a travel vlogger, whenever the child will be outside for holidays, I would like to spend my holidays to travel the country. In other routine days, when the child will be at school, I will be making food for him or her.

I make sure that I will be the perfect crae taker for your child. I have attached the resume of mine.

Yours faithfully,

Alex.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain your interest in caring for children, mention your nursery-teaching experience, and describe travelling and preparing food during the child’s school time. These details make the letter relevant and give the parents a basic sense of your suitability. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, “I have worked as a nersary teacher earlier for 2 years” would be more persuasive if you added a specific responsibility or example of caring for children. Your free-time plans are also somewhat unclear: travelling while the child is “outside for holidays” does not explain how this fits with the six-month arrangement. Clarifying your availability and giving a more concrete reason for wanting this particular position would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce your interest, describe your experience, explain your plans in Australia, and close with a statement of confidence. Connectors such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” help signal the relationship between ideas, and the paragraph breaks make the main sections easy to identify. To make the progression more natural, link each paragraph more directly to the parents’ needs and avoid abrupt shifts. For instance, the move from travelling during holidays to making food on routine days could be explained more clearly. The final reference to an attached résumé also feels sudden; it would fit better with a brief sentence explaining that it provides further details about your experience.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “responsible,” “emotions of children,” “travel vlogger,” and “look after.” However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or unnatural choices reduce precision. “Pure sole” appears to mean “pure souls,” while “care taker” and “crae taker” are misspelled or incorrectly formed; “n ersary” is also an inaccurate spelling of “nursery.” Phrases such as “care them” and “spend my holidays to travel” are not natural collocations. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main message, but they make the letter less polished. Build a bank of accurate childcare and employment phrases, and check spelling and word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “your six-year-old child, who also live with your family” and a reason clause beginning “as they…”. The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “who also live” should agree with the singular “child,” and “I am kind of person” needs an article. The sentence beginning “whenever the child will be outside for holidays” uses an awkward future construction for a time clause, and “I will be making food” is less suitable than a straightforward present or future form for a routine. Aim to control agreement, articles, and time clauses more consistently while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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